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The film is a less important form of art and literature. To what exetent do you agree?

#film #form #art #literature #exetent
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Films are considered to be part of
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art, yet many
people
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 believe that
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movies are not important as
much
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as the other type of art and
litreture
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literature
. I take the view that
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movies are as much important as the
litretaure
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literature
ans
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and
as
 the rest of the art form.
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 of all, films
makes
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people
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 open-minded.
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Movies
provide
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 different stories and diversity of ideas which makes
people
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 open more
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 the others point
view
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 which in turn
leds
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leads
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 the
creats
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create
creates
 effective conversation between
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. To support
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calim
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claim
, a
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research
 conducted by
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 of Harvard shows that the ability
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exccepting
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accepting
excepting
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perspective
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perspectives
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 is higher in
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teenager who tend to watch movies
different
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in different
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counrtires'
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countries
 industries
compary
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company
compared
 to those who don't.
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 of all, not all
people
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 prefer to read books or any kind of
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written
writing
 things. Those
people
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 miss a lot of the
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knowledge
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 that
exsist
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exist
exists
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, many
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movies
 depend on when it comes to the film's idea.
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,
people
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 are able to take the book
advantages
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 if
thery
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they
 watch a movie. In conclusion, the film's industry has a
unnegelatable
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unrelatable
 effect
in
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 our life, and
it
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considered
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 to be
good
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 impact as we can become open to
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others opinion and gain knowledge and ideas from them.
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