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Some people feel that governments should take a large proportion of people's salaries to pay for necessary public services such as roads and schools. Others feel high taxes are a bad thing. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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These days public services are playing a very important role. While some people are of the view that individuals should pay a large proportion of their salary for public services
such
 as roads and schools, others are of the view that it is not good to pay a high amount of taxes. In
this
 essay, I will be discussing both the views and state my opinion that it is a bad thing to pay a higher rate of tax. There are two primary reasons for
this
.
To begin
 with, one of the important reasons as to why the community should not be imposed with
high
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 amount of tariff is the problem of income. Admittedly, in many
countries
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 the number of middle-class sections are more in number than high-class section.
As a result
 of which majority of the population do not have enough money to spend on their education to get a basic degree to find a decent job.
For instance
, a recent study done in India shows that the salary that an average man gets is too less to satisfy their needs and to take care of their families.
Hence
, when they are asked to pay taxes to the government out of their little income they find it difficult.
On the other hand
, public utilities
such
 as proper roads and schools are
also
 necessary.
Firstly
, the lack of a proper road system makes it difficult for people to travel on a day to day basis.
Secondly
, education has an important role to play in our life.
Additionally
, providing free education is important to acquire a basic graduation degree to be eligible to attend interviews in order to get employment.
For example
, China offers these public utilities to the population.
Hence
, the poverty rate has declined. By way of conclusion, I reaffirm my position that
although
 it is necessary for the government to impose a higher tariff on citizens, it has an impact on their living to satisfy their needs.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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