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Happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it difficult to define? What factors are important in achieving happiness?

#happiness #life #factors
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Most
people
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 work hard, day in and out to strive to be happy. Though the definition of
happiness
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 varies from
person
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 to
person
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 - as some get it from
money
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 some from
love
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 and affection - there is
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some commonality among all of those who wish for a fulfilling and satisfactory
life
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 - which is
peace
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 within oneself.
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,
money
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 is believed to be the most essential tool to
happiness
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 by
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 of the
people
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 living on planet earth because
money
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 can help in buying anything
one
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 wants. There is no need of suppressing the desire of owning something when the
person
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 in question is financially capable of purchasing anything in the
world
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.
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 is the very reason why
people
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 these days are in the race of earning more than others
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 being happier than others. But is
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 race of running behind
money
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 for
happiness
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 really worth it ? I mean are the richest
people
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 in the
world
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 really happy with the power of possessing anything in the
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 ?
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 is why
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 theory does not hold true in the case of those who find
happiness
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 in
love
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 and affection. No doubt
money
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 is important, but ultimately for
humans
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 the need of being part of a social group where
one
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 is loved and has someone to
love
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 is a prerequisite. But again, are the
people
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 with a huge family and a lot of friends to take care of them have the utmost
happiness
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 indeed? I believe it all sums up
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two things - mental
peace
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 and strength. Because no matter how wealthy and loved a
person
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 is, he cannot be happy with his
life
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 if he is not at
peace
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 with himself. By being at
peace
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 with oneself I mean having satisfaction with what
one
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 already has. I
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 do not mean that a
person
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 should not have the desire of being more successful in
life
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 in order to lead a fulfilling
life
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 - dreams give purpose to
life
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 - what I mean is
life
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 can only be enjoyed to its fullest if there is no constant disruption caused due to the thoughts of achieving more and more in the future. Basically,
people
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 live in the future at the cost of their present. Another factor that I believe plays a crucial role in staying happy is the strength that a
person
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 mentally possesses. The reason why I believe it is crucial to remain strong mentally is the
life
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 of every individual in the
world
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 - rich or poor - is filled with ups and downs and maintaining sanity is the only way out of any difficult situation. It is clinically proven by many scientists that with the increase in development in most countries of the
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, the number of
people
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 suffering from depression is increasing which in a way proves that wealth is definitely not
one
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 of the factors that give
happiness
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. In conclusion, despite the fact that
money
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 and
love
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 are considered to be the driving force for
happiness
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 by many, mental peacefulness and a stable mindset are the most prominent elements for leading a satisfactory
life
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.
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