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Some people think that it is more effective for students to study in a group, while others believe that it is better to study alone. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is much discussed and debated whether students should
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 alone or
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 in groups. There are some advantages regarding studying independently;
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, it is clear to me that
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 work would lead to better productivity On the one hand, self-
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 may be advantageous in certain circumstances. In
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, it goes without saying that small talks may frequently happen
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 from dissent to unrelated or trivial topics,
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 leading to a waste of time.
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, not only does self-studying save time
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 gives them the freedom to
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 at their own pace. One does not need to either increase their speed, which may result in the vagueness of some points
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 or decrease it to wait for others.
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, it seems to me that studying in a
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 has the edge over studying alone.
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 of all, studying together does one’s improvement good. Everyone may make mistakes or misunderstand some points occasionally. Without a
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 to catch mistakes and help to clarify one’s misinterpretation, it is likely that pupils may not fully understand the material, no matter how hard they have worked.
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,
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 in a
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 would be more beneficial when it comes to dealing with challenging tasks. Basically, everyone has their strengths and weaknesses,
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 each
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 may help their co-members to have a better understanding
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 specific areas.
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, teaching back knowledge
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 one has acquired is a good opportunity to gain long-term memory on the matter. In conclusion, while studying individually has some beneficial effects on oneself, I believe
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 can bring us more effective consequences
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • collaborative learning
  • peer feedback
  • social interaction
  • deep understanding
  • group dynamics
  • personalized learning
  • self-discipline
  • concentration
  • diverse perspectives
  • isolation
  • motivation
  • peer support
  • groupthink
  • distractions
  • commitment
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