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Some people believe that everyone has a right to have access to university education and that governments should make it free for all students no matter what financial background they have. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #right #access #university #education #governments #students #matter #background
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Education
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 is the primary right of
students
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. Many
universities
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 offer different programs to encourage
students
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 to take part and learn different skills to grow in life.
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, some people believe that everyone has a right to
access
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 university
education
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 and governments should make it free for all the
students
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 despite their financial background. I partially agree with the above statement.
Firstly
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, I believe that the
students
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 who are academically sound or who have had performed exceptionally well in any
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 or sports field or are passionate about their career goals should be given free
access
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 to the university
education
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 despite their financial background.
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,
universities
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 should carefully validate the profile of the
students
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 before providing financial aids.
Universities
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 should evaluate the candidate’s profile on certain criteria. The sponsorships or fellowships programs are given to the
students
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 who had proven his/herself in certain fields of
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 or sports.
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, the government should open more
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universities
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 for
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 and provide financial aid to the
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 who are well deserving. Providing them financial help, help these
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 to focus on learning and developing which in turn helps to grow the economy.
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, I think providing free
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 to the
students
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 take undue advantage of the university’s
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 system. The
students
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 who have no passion to learn new skills or to grow their career; these
students
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 waste the university’s time and valuable resources. The quality of
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also
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 decreases.
Such
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students
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 should not be given free
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 to
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.
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, not every student deserves free
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 to
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 in colleges or
universities
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. There should be criteria to evaluate the candidate’s profile based on which
universities
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 should provide financial aid.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Higher education
  • Accessibility
  • Social mobility
  • Meritocracy
  • Economic growth
  • Equality
  • Subsidize
  • Fiscal sustainability
  • Human capital
  • Incentivize
  • Underfunded
  • Tuition fees
  • Academic achievement
  • Workforce
  • Tax burden
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