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Some movies are serious designed to make the audience think. Other movies are designed primarily to amuse and entertain. Which type of movie do you prefer? Use specific reasons and answers to support your answer.

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In my opinion, I would definitely enjoy
both
 because they leave a positive effect
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 the hearts of the spectators at the end of the show. I have seen
movies
 which are serious and make people think a lot
for example
 “ Mind games” which is an American
movie
 and “Alice in borderland” which is a Korean
one
.
Both
 of these
movies
 involved solving riddles
which
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 are manmade where life and death is a matter of course.
This
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 situations create a thrill of the unexpected and leave the audiences
waiting
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wanting
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 for more. They can be
quiet
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quite
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 violent in nature
however
 and make a good feat only for the bold and adventurous.
Movies
which
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 amuse and entertain are those which include humour with a touch of goofiness and clumsiness as well.
One
 of the most amusing and entertaining
movies
 I have seen is Spiderman 4. In
this
movie
 ,
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 pack is combined with a sense of ridicule among the superheroes which somewhat makes the
movie
 funny.
Movies
 which amuse and entertain are
also
 more suitable for children as they are easily understandable. For examples cartoons
such
 as " scooby doo" and tom and jerry. In my opinion , what matters most is the quality of the
movies
 which is
both
 involving and addictive and usually those which are serious and make the Audience
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 satisfy these
feature
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.
However
,
one
 of the setbacks of these types of
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movie
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 is that their concept
are
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 a little
diffilcult
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difficult
 to understand and may suit only a certain group of people and adults.
As
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a
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conclusion, I believe that
both
 versions of
movie
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 play important roles in the entertainment industry and as long it
fullfills
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fulfils
ones
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 money’s worth it
doesnt
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doesn't
 really matter which
one
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