Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interests, and whether they are married or single. Some people say that this information may be relevant and useful. Others disagree. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

One of the most significant issues that many people of today’s society are very concerned about is
education
. Some people believe that schools
in
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all
levels
spend too much
time
on teaching facts rather than teaching practical skills.
Although
I agree with
this
view, I think that
this
fact has changed positively in recent years. My point of view is that all
students
should be studied facts and
practiced
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equally in order to could apply in reality when they graduated. To put it another way,
students
have
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not enough
time
to practice.
This
leads to
students
maybe
get
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getting
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confused when they have to do it in real life. In fact, most
levels
of
education
such
as elementary school, high school consume a lot of
time
for theory and probably not enough
time
for practice.
For instance
, pupils are taught full
time
for a variety of subjects,
such
as maths, literature, history, geography in primary level so there is too
less
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time
left for practical skills like how to apply maths in reality.
Nevertheless
, there are better improvements in higher
levels
,
such
as college or university.
Students
are appropriately divided into their timetables between theory and practice. In the past,
students
used to do
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internship
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in their final year, but recently they have gone to the field from the
first
year to the
last
year on a regular basis. To conclude, it is irrefutable that there is
not
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equal between learning facts and learning practical skills in almost all
levels
of
education
.
However
, it seems to be changing better in higher
levels
and we can hope that the
education
industry will gradually improve
this
situation
in
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all
levels
.
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  • job application
  • personal information
  • hobbies and interests
  • marital status
  • relevant
  • useful
  • privacy
  • assessing candidates
  • qualifications
  • experience
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