Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interests, and whether they are married or single. Some people say that this information may be relevant and useful. Others disagree. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Stark, I am doing as a volunteer in our local community. During the past 3 months, I have been helped the old people who live in
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to improve their life. In fact, I help
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read and write letters, which are difficult for them. I have
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in September and I will
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part-time
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, I know a friend who is interested in voluntary
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my position. I will still try to participate in voluntary
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whenever I finish my studies. Sincerely, Hoang Quyen
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • job application
  • personal information
  • hobbies and interests
  • marital status
  • relevant
  • useful
  • privacy
  • assessing candidates
  • qualifications
  • experience
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