Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Now a days
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competition
among
children
is
at
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a
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very
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high
level
like
olympyad
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olympiad
Olympia
and many other exams depending on different countries. There are different competitions
on
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at
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State/province
level
, country
level
and world
level
. So, every
high
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level
competition
leads to encouragement in each and every child who ever is participated.
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Whenever
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When ever
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Whenever
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any child
is participated
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participates
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in any
competition
then
after that
competition
they found themselves a step ahead
rom
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from
other
children
, every
competition
creates a positive vibe in that child and it increases the confidence
level
. But
competition
is with
from
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apply
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your own friends is not good. If there's a
competition
then
it must be at
high
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a high
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level
. Co-operation in
children
becoming more useful adults it creates a maturity
level
in
children
they understand when people
needs
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need
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help and what help are they expecting from us. By Co-operating, they
leads
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lead
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to good team player and
may be
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maybe
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it will be a good leader in future.
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Whoever
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Who ever
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cooperate with others is having a loving nature and it always
create
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positive
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aura, which means a lot. Every
person
will love them because of
its
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their
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nature of cooperation. As per my
opinion
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every individual should keep in mind that
competition
is good but cooperation is necessary if you are doing
competition
without cooperation
then
you never be a good
person
in your life. Always remind a quote "NO one knows everything, but everyone knows something" if one's thinking that he/she is
a
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super talented
then
they are absolutely wrong. And a
person
who knows that above quote is always
remind
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that he/she
always
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is always
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a
person
that we called "ground to earth". So, never forget to cooperate with others and always remain in
competition
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the competition
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as well.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • compete
  • cooperate
  • useful
  • adults
  • skills
  • motivation
  • drive
  • resilience
  • failure
  • workplace
  • empathy
  • social skills
  • reduce
  • stress
  • pressure
  • balanced
  • approach
  • ideal
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