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Shortage of the houses has become q severe problem in the cities and only the government can solve this problem To what extent do you agree or disagree with this?

In recent years, accommodation in the cities has not been enough that has turned into a big problem and some
people
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 argue that
governments
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 should tackle
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. I partially agree with
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 idea that not only authorities but
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 individuals can contribute to
prevent
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 the shortage of
houses
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 There are various measures that
governments
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 could take to keep the lack of accommodation occurring.
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, they should invest the fund to build new sky-high apartments that can supply several families with places to live.
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, building dormitories for students who are now residing in most flats of the cities can be a solution as well. Apart from the
governments
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, individuals who are looking for
houses
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 should come up with
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solutions.
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 of all, those who come from countries to study or work must return to their own places as soon as their missions finish.
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,
majority
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the majority
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 of
houses
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 can be empty for those who are in need.
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,
people
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 who have two or more
houses
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 in cities ought to give one or some of them as rent. In conclusion,
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responsibility
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the responsibility
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 of providing
people
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 with
houses
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 are on
governments
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' shoulders,
people
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 themselves must think about it as well

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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