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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible ina scientific research, bussiness and the acedemic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Dicuss both the views and give your own opinion?

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In the modern world of Social
media
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people
share
 a lot of
information
 related to science, business or study.
Some times
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Sometimes
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 the
information
 is correct
however
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,however
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, in
majority
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the majority
a majority
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 of the situations a lot of wrong
information
 is published which is incorrect. There is always a debate around what
information
 should be shared and what not.
Firstly
, there is a set of
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the group
a group
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group
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groups
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which
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who
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 feel that we should
share
 as much
as
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apply
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information
 as possible. The reason for
this
 belief is that sharing is caring and
information
 should reach to
maximum
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a maximum
the maximum
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 number of
people
.
For instance
, there are some groups over the internet
who
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that
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 provide free education to all.
Secondly
,
on the contrary
, the other group feel that some
information
 is too
valueable
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valuable
 to be posted free of cost.
This
 set of
people
feel
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feels
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 that if every valuable
information
 is sent free of cost
then
majority
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the majority
a majority
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 of the
eduational
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educational
centers
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centres
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 will fail and there will be no value of the
information
.
Additonally
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Additionally
 in some cases it might be misused. To conclude, we can say that it is good to
share
 the
information
 so that maximum
people
 can use it.
However
,
i
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I
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 feel that we should
share
 only that
information
 which is true and is of use to everybody.
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