Some people think young people should follow the tradition of the society. Others think that they should be free to behave as individuals. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In the present era,
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characteristics are different from the past ,some
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argue that the young generation should follow the historic culture but others think that they can live with their own interest as free human beings.
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essay will discuss both views.According to my perspective society should provide
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to everyone to choose their attitude and behaviours. On the one side ,
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argue for saving the traditions of our society.
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,these
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encourage the young to follow traditional values.They believe that if we follow the historic values,it is good for the well being of
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generation too.
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a large number of
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follow the traditional ayurvedic medicine for all illnesses and they promote it as well as discourage allopathic medicine.
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these groups of
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force young
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to follow the traditions. On the other side,young individuals can live with their wishes.Depending upon the needs of the surrounding of a person they can make changes in their life.
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everybody has the right to choose their spirituality so
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with different believes we can be found in one family.
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all
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have the
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and right to choose their behaviour and characteristics. According to my
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each individual should create their lifestyle and attitude.The low and government give necessary
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to all for their successful and happy life. In conclusion,despite the value of our tradition,I would like to give
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full
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in their whole life.
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