Inform bank manager in a letter about the fact that you cannot go to agreed meeting. You should cover the following, inform and apologize. Discribe the reason for your absence. Propose new time.

Dear Sir, I am Ankit Prajapati, writing
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letter to inform you about not being able to attend the agreed meeting at 11.00 a.m. on 7th January. I sincerely apologize for
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intimation. You might
aware
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that I
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visited you at your HDFC Ranip branch on Friday 24th December to get information about the home loan
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for
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, same you
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provided me time and date as mentioned above for
meeting
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. On the next day, my friends
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decided to visit Goa in the second week of January, and our meeting is falling in the same week. So We have to cancel it and reschedule the same. I hereby request you to kindly excuse me and reschedule it for any day in the
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week of January
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your time and convenience. You can contact me on my cell number 9428599980 or drop me an email regarding the time and date. Waiting for your best reply. Yours faithfully, Ankit Prajapati

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coherence and cohesion
Enhance the structural clarity of your letter by succinctly separating the paragraphs to improve readability. A clear introduction, body, and conclusion would help the flow of ideas.
task achievement
Try to provide a more detailed explanation for your absence to ensure a complete response to the task.
tone
The letter has a polite and formal tone, which is appropriate for a communication with a bank manager.

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