Nowadays many people may have to work longer time and they feel more stressful than before. What are the reasons ? what employers do to life easier?
In the 21st century,human life became more complex in nature.Reportedly,
people
working
long hours for fulfilling their nonstop needs and demands whereby, Wrong verb form
work
these
outcome Change the determiner
this
results
mental stress in Add the preposition
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workplace
. In Add an article
the workplace
this
essay, I will explain the real reasons behind this
problem and suggestion
for employers to reduce these situations.
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suggestions
To begin
,the adaption of materialism generate extravagance and the
lavish lifestyle among Correct article usage
a
people
whereby, it develop more working hours for making money.On the other hand
, competition between colleagues and companies are always motivates
busy Change the verb form
are always motivated
schedule
among staff because they need profit in their concerned field of industry. Admittedly, modern life is more individualistic in which Fix the agreement mistake
schedules
people
always want luxurious items to maintain their high social status.To support this
, branded or new model products like car
and Fix the agreement mistake
cars
a
mobile phones are Correct article usage
apply
buying
extensively by Wrong verb form
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middle
class and Correct article usage
the middle
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apply
people
from poor
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a poor
family
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families
In other words
, extra money for payment ofl
bill Correct your spelling
of
results
long hours of office work.
There are many policies and programmes available for employers to reduce stress among staff Add the preposition
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Firstly
, introduction
of Add an article
the introduction
appropriate
time schedule for Correct article usage
an appropriate
exercise
like yoga ,cardio and meditation because it helps physiological and mental development among employees. To illustrate Change the noun form
exercises
this
, In Japan everyday
at least half an hour Replace the word
every day
physical
exercise Change preposition
of physical
allowed
for IT professionals. Resultantly, new studies Add a missing verb
is allowed
shows
that these policies reduce 75% of stress relief among Japanese professionals. Change the verb form
show
Secondly
, all industries need to appreciate staff achievements although
, treat them equally and meaningfully. So it will definitely give them mental relaxation. Thirdly
, avoid unnecessary competition between other industries whereas, it promotes humanistic
and valuable atmosphere in Add an article
a humanistic
workplace
.
In conclusion, there is a saying 'a bird without wings' Add an article
the workplace
similarly
happiness is the true motto of human
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a human
the human
being
. Fix the agreement mistake
beings
For instance
, the owners of the industries always remind that their staffs are the real treasure and treat them well.Submitted by sooryag03 on
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