Nowadays many people may have to work longer time and they feel more stressful than before. What are the reasons ? what employers do to life easier?

In the 21st century,human life became more complex in nature.Reportedly,
people
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long hours for fulfilling their nonstop needs and demands whereby,
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outcome
results
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mental stress in
workplace
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the workplace
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. In
this
essay, I will explain the real reasons behind
this
problem and
suggestion
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for employers to reduce these situations.
To begin
,the adaption of materialism generate extravagance and
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lavish lifestyle among
people
whereby, it develop more working hours for making money.
On the other hand
, competition between colleagues and companies
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busy
schedule
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among staff because they need profit in their concerned field of industry. Admittedly, modern life is more individualistic in which
people
always want luxurious items to maintain their high social status.To support
this
, branded or new model products like
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and
a
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mobile phones are
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extensively by
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class and
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people
from
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family
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.
In other words
, extra money for payment
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long hours of office work. There are many policies and programmes available for employers to reduce stress among staff
Firstly
,
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of
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time schedule for
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like yoga ,cardio and meditation because it helps physiological and mental development among employees. To illustrate
this
, In Japan
everyday
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at least half an hour
physical
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exercise
allowed
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for IT professionals. Resultantly, new studies
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that these policies reduce 75% of stress relief among Japanese professionals.
Secondly
, all industries need to appreciate staff achievements
although
, treat them equally and meaningfully. So it will definitely give them mental relaxation.
Thirdly
, avoid unnecessary competition between other industries whereas, it promotes
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and valuable atmosphere in
workplace
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the workplace
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. In conclusion, there is a saying 'a bird without wings'
similarly
happiness is the true motto of
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being
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.
For instance
, the owners of the industries always remind that their staffs are the real treasure and treat them well.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • comfortable lifestyle
  • make ends meet
  • culture of 'presenteeism'
  • job insecurity
  • technological advancements
  • constant connectivity
  • globalization
  • irregular work hours
  • flexible working schedules
  • work-life balance
  • employee training and development
  • productivity
  • efficiency
  • healthier work environment
  • mental health resources
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