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Scientific researches should be the responsibility of governments rather than commercial organizations. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#responsibility #governments #organizations
It is widely believed that scientific researches should not be the responsibility of governments
besides
 government, commercial
organization
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organizations
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 have to take amenableness. I hold the view that private
company
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companies
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 are more beneficial in
this
 sector as compared to
state
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. I
am disagree
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 with
this
 statement and now in
this
essay
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 I will discuss that, how
private
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the private
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 organization is good for
the
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scientific exploration.
Firstly
, nobody would dispute the fact that
,
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 owner of the
company
 Tesla
Mr.
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 Elon musk announced the electric vehicle which becomes very legendary among all the country's citizens
,
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 because
this
 was an incredible launch which shows a different view regarding fuel consumption to all the other automobile companies. And
this
 can be lead to a new achievement towards
fire wood
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 used in asunder countries.
Secondly
, research suggests that the
first
company
 which arranges a tour out of the planet earth is named
as
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Space-X, and
this
company
 is
also
 a private organization. An individual who never thought that he/she can travel in space, but
this
company
 makes it possible by space exploration. A human who travelled all over the world now he/
she
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can travel in space easily by just spending money. To conclude, there are many government
oraganization
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organization
 as well who researches and creates benchmark
continously
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continuously
. But, commercial ones are having great outputs in
this
 area. As I discussed that a new automobile fuel was discovered by tesla, and travelling become possible because of
space-x
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company
, and there are many other examples as well. So,
state
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 has to
be promote
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 mercantile organizations for the rapid growth in
this
 field.
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