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Some people say that the government should pay for the public healthcare and education while others say it is not the governments responsibility do you agree or disagree?

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There is
a
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divergent
views
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 about government policy. Some people believe that governments should concentrate on paying for
the
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public healthcare and even
education
.
On
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contrast
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, some believe that healthcare and
education
 are not associated with government and authorities should focus on other subjects. In the following paragraphs, I intend to outline the arguments of both sides. It is true and irrefutable
that is
 the
governments
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government's
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 responsibility to make basic health and primary
education
. If government increase the public health level, there will be
less
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 infectious diseases.
For instance
, during the COVID-19 pandemic. When people got infected and the symptoms were relieved if there was a free cure for
this
 virus and sick people got the cure as soon as possible, it would eradicate
this
 illness at the beginning.
This
 might have a positive impact on
current
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 economy.
In addition
, free
education
have
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 its own benefit for society. The reason is that the nation’s prosperity very much depends on the contribution made by its well-educated citizens.
Initially
, students with low financial strength
are not worry
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are not worried
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 about paying tuition. They can completely focus on their lessons to get higher grades and get a degree.
Also
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 they can think about job prospects and get hired in a place with a good salary.
Secondly
, individuals who live in
a rural areas
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rural areas
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 with narrow
circumstance
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 can get educated.
Also
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 they can discover their capacity. In
other ward
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, ensuring these elements can secure their future and it will solve so many issues in current society. After having explored
i
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 have reached the conclusion that governments should pay for
the
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public healthcare and
education
 and I completely agree with
this
 view.
Finally
,
i
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 Believe private schools and private hospitals can be available for those who want and can
afford
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 ,but
The
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free schools and free hospitals should always be there.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Universal health care
  • Socio-economic background
  • Government-backed
  • Economic growth
  • Workforce
  • Innovations
  • Bureaucracy
  • One-size-fits-all solutions
  • Private sectors
  • Fundamental right
  • Public funding
  • Health care and education standards
  • Efficiency
  • Inefficiency
  • Economic development
  • Public health
  • Taxation
  • Competitiveness
  • Quality of services
  • Access to education
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