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The plans below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment. task 1 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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There is no doubt that these days farming is more developed than in the past. The question is, why do many people around the world still suffer from hunger even though the advances made in agriculture. In
this
 essay ,I am going to discuss the problem and give a solution. In terms of problems, many people still go hunger around the world. The main reason given to support
this
 claim is that climate change because of the increase in the heat on earth many ice mountains go ing to be melted so there will be more storm weather
such
 as rainstorms, snowstorms and tornadoes that could damage the harvest and will be poor harvest.
In other words
, Climate change really has an effect on food production.
Moreover
, water sources have slightly decreased nowadays so that might affect farming
as a result
 that might affect people and starvation could happen .
However
 many countries nowadays working to give a solution for
this
 problem .
Firstly
 we should be stopping the production of plastic.
In other words
 ,prevent the companies from plastic production and replace it with other materials.
Secondly
 reduces the number of cars and replaced them with green bus electric cars.
This
 is because the oil that these kinds of
cars
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that
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could be dangerous for the environment.
Thirdly
 the government should ensure the public for gardening . In conclusion, it is evident that climate change effect our food Proudaltion must ensure steps are taken to prevent
this
 phenomenon from deteriorating facture.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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