The Internet has changed the way we interact with each other now compared to in the past. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?
Nowadays television is playing a vital role in our today's world.The Public is making their concentration towards
entertainment
rather than interacting with family.Use synonyms
it
leads to the population becoming dumb and Capitalize word
It
Moreover
, ensuring safety measures with the crowd. I strongly agreeLinking Words
apply
that people Verb problem
apply
get
affected by television. Verb problem
are
This
essay will give the strong points why I agree with Linking Words
this
and provide a logical conclusion. First of all, Linking Words
entertainment
plays a major role in everyone's life Use synonyms
while
few are not interested because of their mind psychology. I strongly believe that movies and web series can make the crowd to apply be happy and Linking Words
it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
makes
Correct subject-verb agreement
make
us
Correct pronoun usage
apply
a
day Correct article usage
the
very
shorter when we are Rephrase
apply
in
Change preposition
apply
the
Correct article usage
apply
bore
. Replace the word
bored
For instance
, in recent two Linking Words
years
most of the population Add a comma
years,
are
Wrong verb form
has been
work
from Wrong verb form
working
homes
and few people have lost their jobs Fix the agreement mistake
home
and
in that Correct word choice
apply
times
if they want to enhance their hours decrease Fix the agreement mistake
time
entertainment
become the biggest part Use synonyms
in
everyone's life. Change preposition
of
Secondly
,the community has Linking Words
also
become lazy Linking Words
due to
over Linking Words
addictive
Replace the word
addiction
of
television. Change preposition
to
This
way people are extending their hours Linking Words
apply
late at night and not maintaining a proper lifestyle. Verb problem
apply
For instance
, apply am facing Linking Words
this
issue Linking Words
apply
these days,because of work from home because of Verb problem
apply
this
I have undergone various health issues Linking Words
and
but it is public to be protected Correct word choice
apply
with
others. Change preposition
from
To conclude
,I strongly believe that Linking Words
its
public Change the word
the
to be occupied
their time with Wrong verb form
should occupy
entertainment
rather Use synonyms
thaN
interaction with society.Correct your spelling
than
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.
A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).
Stick to this essay structure:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion