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Nowadays, some businesses face problems with new employees who have just finished their education and may lack interpersonal skills such as the ability to work in team. What do you think is the main cause of the problem? How can it be resolved?

#businesses #face #employees #education #lack #skills #ability #work #team
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It is true that most of the
business
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businesses
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 getting issues with new people whose are graduated recently because
their
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 have less ability to
work
 as a team.
This
 essay will
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discuss
the
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both
problems
 and possible solutions. There are various factors
which
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leads
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 to
this
 situation.
Firstly
,
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pupils
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 do not have experience as they have completed their studies and
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 working.
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, there is
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a lot
 of
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 between reading from books and doing it practically.
Secondly
,
work
 pressure and competition when new
employee
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employees
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start
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 working there is huge pressure to complete deadlines and do better than each other.
Lastly
, Schools and colleges do not educate students
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 importance of teamwork and healthy competition.
For example
, colleges do according to the books and do not aware youngsters about
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work
 environment. There is always a solution to every problem. Educational
instutions
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institutions
 should arrange seminars to educate
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children
childrens
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children
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 about the importance of skills interpersonal, social and teamwork.
Business
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Businesses
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 should provide the proper training for the role they are hired
and
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 polish their skills to communicate with
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a colleague
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colleague
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colleagues
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 about the
problems
 they are facing.So, that they discuss and
work
 in a group. Newly
graduate
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graduates
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 should learn the health
competiton
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competition
 in which they can grow and lead to
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positive
 outcomes. To conclude, new
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employees
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employee
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having
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 difficulties in interpersonal and social skills which creates
problems
 for
business
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businesses
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 to deal with.
This
 essay has
disscus
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discuss
 both pros and cons which nowadays various owners going through. In my
opinions
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,
this
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these
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problems
 could rectify and leads to
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positive
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work
 environment.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • theoretical knowledge
  • practical skills
  • interpersonal skills
  • teamwork capabilities
  • workforce
  • effective collaboration
  • mandatory internships
  • real-world work experience
  • project-based learning
  • educational curriculum
  • simulate real-world scenarios
  • mentorship programs
  • workshops
  • supportive environment
  • collaborate
  • internship programs
  • curriculum
  • graduate
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