Nowadays people tend to change a few careers during life. What are the reasons for this, in your opinion? Do you think it is good for the society as a whole?

In the era of technology , finding
jobs
become one of the most important issues
however
,meanwhile, some people change their occupations several times . I am going to talk about why some public find various careers in their lifetime and
then
I will give my own opinion . The main reason why people change their
jobs
repeatedly is that they do not love their work ,and they do not enjoy it .
Moreover
, some of the workers do not earn enough
money
which is really important for the families,so they are always looking for suitable works that have enough revenue.
Furthermore
, some prominent
companies
try to hire the best
employees
,so they always want to steal other
companies
workers.
For example
, some institutes offer more
money
to other
companies
employees
, in
this
way ,workers become motivated to change their
jobs
. In my opinion , I think leaving a job has two points of view. sometimes it can help people to find their dream
jobs
that were always in their
mind
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.
also
it can help them to find lucrative revenue ,especially when they find enough experience.
On the other hand
, changing work can have a lot of side effects for
companies
,to illustrate
this employers
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this employer
these employers

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must spend a lot of time and
money
for their
employees
to increase their experience ,but after a
while
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their labours prefer to leave them for any reason ,so it can be a kind of loss for them . In conclusion, it seems that ,
although
replacing occupation has some benefits for
employees
,
such
as reaching their goals or finding more
money
, it becomes one of the most important issues of
companies
which has so many damages for them ,like wasting
money
and time.
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