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In the past lectures were the traditional method of teaching large numbers of students. Nowadays new technology is increasingly being used to teach students. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this new approach in teaching?

#lectures #method #numbers #students #technology #approach
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 present era, technology is vastly being utilised to educate
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compared to past
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generation
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 of undergraduates.
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more skills by using online
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 while poor
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pros and cons of
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learners.
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Students
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 have more opportunities to choose their
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 development.As well as they can attend online classes without going
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 particular learning institute. It would be beneficial to the learner who is currently working.
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, they can able to get
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 , achieve new skills in
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individuals tend to use virtual classes as
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 on-line based
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 universities in UK and Australia.
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 the other hand, the majority of
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virtual
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connection failure and expenses of the equipment
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, tabs etc. Even government introduce on-line based
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, some individuals need guidance or motivation whenever they feel
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board
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.so if they lost their
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study
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 they wouldn't have
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 to communicate with other
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 and sort out the problem. In conclusion, with the technology development, there
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possitive
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positive
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 outweigh the drawbacks.Government should get
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 with the particular authority to overcome those negative
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