Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Others think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both views and give your own opinions.

Advertisements have become part of our daily life, we can see them everywhere. Some
people
think that
citizens
just ignore them, while
this
essay believes that it can still attract
customers
. On the one hand, there are two reasons why
customers
no longer pay attention to them. The main reason is
because
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that
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companies always exaggerate the effects of their
products
on the advertisement.
For example
, some
skin care
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skincare
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products
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product
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ads state that their lotions can remove wrinkles but actually they cannot.
Therefore
,
citizens
will not believe in what the commercials
shows
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and will not pay attention to them. Another reason is that advertisements can be seen everywhere. No matter walking on the street or watching YouTube at home,
people
must watch some ads, so many
citizens
think that they are boring and annoying.
On the other hand
, there are two reasons why it can still persuade
people
to buy things.
Firstly
, commercials can introduce some special functions of the product. Companies can inform
customers
what their
products
are different from others and
people
may be attracted by
it
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.
Moreover
, advertisements can introduce some new
products
. Many
people
prefer buying the latest
products
as they are curious about the difference between the new one and the old one.
For instance
,
people
may notice there is a new model of
smartphone
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the smartphone
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if it is promoted
in
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TV and they may purchase the product. To conclude,
although
citizens
may not put too much
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attention
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attentions
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attention
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on commercials, it can still provide an opportunity for companies to inform
customers
of their
products
as well as the unique characteristics and exclusive benefits.
As a result
, it can still promote consumer culture and encourage
people
to buy things.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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