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Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as sahara desert or antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places

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Recently people from different demographic locations are visiting
such
 places where the weather
condition
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extreme
one
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. Though
such
 travels help them to acclimatise to live in
worst
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the worst
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 weather
condition
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conditions
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but
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, the difficulties are
also
 imperative to
be consider
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 in case of any emergency.
This
 essay discusses not only the benefits of the same but
also
 the dark side of it. To start with, travellers can know about unknown facts
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around
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round
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around
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 the earth. While visiting
such
location
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locations
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 they can boost their hidden interest
of
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further
 study and research in the area they travel.
For example
, students from different countries travel to
Antartica
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Antarctica
, and later on study global geography or science to have
details
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 knowledge of that continent.
Moreover
, globetrotters are kin interested in testing the capability to
adopt
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 and live in adverse
condition
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conditions
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. By doing so, a few of them wish to prove themselves to be strong.
Furthermore
, a few of them build up
confidence
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 to tackle all hardship in real life. It is worth mentioning, that people having experience of living in
extreme
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the extreme
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condition
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conditions
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 set up a benchmark for others;
such
 as Arunima Sinha, the athlete turn mountain climber, is
example
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 of the same.
On the other hand
, the adverse impact of the same is not less. It is really hard to arrange basic facilities in case of an emergency. In case of any
mishappening
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 the family is left behind causing
immature
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 demise of
life
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 of the bag packer.
For instance
, people who met an accident while climbing
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Mount Everest became physically disabled or passed away.
In addition
,
such
 travel is much more expensive. Visitors have to pack all the necessary commodities and have to carry
it
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them
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 throughout the journey. In terms of
expenses
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 it is manifold more in comparison to other travels. To conclude,
traveling
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 to places with
adverse
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the adverse
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condition
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conditions
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 is enthralling but, impedance
also
 prevails. Extreme weather
condition
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conditions
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 may help to adjust in any situation;
however
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 life-threat is a matter of concern.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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