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The shows the main methods of transportation for people traveling to a university for work or study in 2004 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

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The pie charts depict the proportion of
travelers
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 using five different modes of transportation to commute to a
university
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 for work and study purposes in 2004 and 2009. We can observe from the pie-charts that the
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 of
people
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 commuting by cars significantly decreased from the year 2004 to 2009 while the other modes of transportation witnessed an upward trend. Over half of the
people
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 (51%) in 2004
traveled
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 by car followed by bus which recorded a
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 of 33%. It is apparent that only 9% of
people
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 used bicycles to commute to
university
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 which was about three times the
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 of commuters who used the train. Meanwhile, 4% of the
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 preferred to walk to go to
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university
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. The proportion of bus-based
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 rose significantly by 13% as a new bus stop was introduced at the
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 in 2006.
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, some modifications were made to the car parking in 2008 at the
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 which led to the
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 of car
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dwindled
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 to 28%.
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, the percentage of bicyclists witnessed a substantial rise by 7% along with the train passengers and pedestrians proportion which followed an upward trend to 4% and 6% respectively.
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