Some people think that it is fine for professional sport men and sportswomen to mis behave on or off the field, as long as they are playing well. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

It is true that sports have a significant role in the life of human beings even though
people
are living in a digital world. A sizeable proportion of
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of the opinion that
athletes
can behave badly in the
field
and outside as long as they are performing well in sports. I completely disagree with the opinion and believe that way
players
behave on and
off
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field
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is
also
important. Without a shadow of
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,
athletes
have a great influence
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the life of
people
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youngsters.
This
would mean that
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young
people
blindly follow whatever
players
do in their professional as well as personal life. So, if professional
players
misconduct
off
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field
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, common
people
believe that it is fine to behave badly in public as their
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athletes
do so, which in turn adversely affect
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society itself.
Moreover
,
bad
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behavior
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of sportsmen affects the sport itself.
For example
, bribery in cricket
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years ago declined the demand
of
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cricket among viewers.
Hence
, it is quite appropriate for me to believe that misconduct of
athletes
are
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not at all accepted. Another main negative impact often seen is that, use of abusive language
on
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field
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and violence. In detail, some
players
become
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aggressive in
field
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may be due to sportsman spirit and try to cheat other
players
. In
case
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of football sometimes
caption
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of the team simply blame other
players
by
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verbal abuse even though, others play well which leads to low confidence in team members. As a consequence, a good number of
people
think
mis
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behavior
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of
players
off is not agreeable. In conclusion, it is evident from the above reasons that why the bad
behavior
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of sportsmen is not acceptable. In the near future, it is anticipated that
this
trend would likely
to
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continue.
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