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Write about the following topic. Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

#topic #people #advertisements #products #lives
These days, branding plays a vital role for both manufacturers and the general public as it creates awareness of a new
product
 in the market. It is believed that many
people
 got fascinated by the promotional activities ,
consequently
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 they end up buying the same which is not necessary.
However
,
advertisement
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advertisements
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 inform folks about the latest
product
 which proves to be beneficial for
people
.
First
 and foremost ,because of advertising,
people
 come to know about the additional features of the existing
product
 which are actually required by many.
To
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 instance, when
automobile
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the automobile
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 industry launched compressed natural gas
variant
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variants
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 in different cars , it was promoted through advertisements and proved to be helpful for
the
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apply
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society as it controlled pollution caused by petroleum cars.
Secondly
,
pollution
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the pollution
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 rate is rising at a very fast pace due to which air quality is getting worst leading to the high demand
of
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 air purifiers. Some companies
has
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 taken initiatives to
lauch
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launch
such
 kind of
product
 which will reach to
people
 only through media and
helped
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 many
people
 to save their lives. To conclude,
Pros
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 and cons
lies
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 with everything .
Therefore
, we need to put emphasis on the positive side which states the awareness of the
product
 is necessary and only possible with
such
 type of methods only and reach
the
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 large number of buyers in
single
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 go.
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