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It is sometimes said that people should be encouraged to get married before they are 30, as this is best both for the individual and for society. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience

#people #society
Marriage
 is a key social construct that has always been encouraged universally so that an individual can have a well-balanced life.
Although
, there are some debates as to when the right
age
 is. An average adult completes their education and is usually in the early to
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mid
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 stage in their career by the
age
 of 30 years. As they venture out to compete in the professional world, they might move from their hometown. As humans, we always crave human connections, and the best way to ensure prolonged support and encouragement is through
marriage
. Another reason for society encouraging
marriage
 before 30 years of
age
 is primarily due to
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 of
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 in health and hormone levels at
this
age
, which in turn affects the chance of conception.
Furthermore
, the health of
an
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offspring
are
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 determined by the conception
age
 of the parents.
Hence
, as a society, there is a significant interest to ensure that
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future generations are healthy.
On the other hand
, some people might argue that there are some concerns that have to be taken into account before considering
marriage
 at 30.
For instance
,
the
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early-mid career professionals might underestimate the costs of raising a child, and the children
as a result
 would end up with fewer opportunities than their parents. In my opinion,
marriage
 is a key society norm that should be encouraged but
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age
 should be the individual choice based on financial and health status.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fertility
  • Maternal health
  • Psychological stability
  • Social maturity
  • Economic benefits
  • Shared responsibilities
  • Ancestral customs
  • Cultural imperatives
  • Personal development
  • Career establishment
  • Societal norms
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Divorce rates
  • Life decisions
  • Subjective wellbeing
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