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Learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages. If these are not taught, many are at risk of dying out. In your opinion, is it important for everyone to learn English? Should we try to ensure the survival of local languages and, if so, how?

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language
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 throughout the
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 decades.
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, the vast majority of adolescents embark to learn
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 at school. It can be spotted that
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 tendency is prevail across
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 large number of countries.
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 noteworthy is the attention to mother tongue has been declining due to a lot of students
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 to concentrate on
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. Some people deem that
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English
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the English
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language
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 is essential for juveniles while others argue with
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 protection of local languages. I advocate strongly with both opinions and am going to describe the core reasons of
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 issue, to provide feasible ramifications of its and to give answers
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 above questions. On the one hand,
English
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 is a common
language
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 and in demand everywhere.
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 of all, knowledge of
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language
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 supplies huge capabilities for the person.
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,
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a human
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 with
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of
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 can be enrolled
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 universities or colleges, which are located
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 not his native country.
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, it would be unfair not to mention the fact, that people often confirm the
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’s level by international exams
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,
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 in worldwide corporations and receive
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 wage.
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, he can obtain a desirable post and be
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for
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 employers.
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, learning
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 is a substantial process in
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 nurture and compulsory course in
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 curriculum.
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, local languages become not so attractive for children and they don’t garner significant attention to learn their mother tongue. According to the various surveys, which were conducted by newspapers and magazines, it can be concluded that the number of students, who spend more time to study native
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, has been dwindling. Beyond that,
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 extinction. In my opinion, the government should concentrate on these troubles and encourage children to learn not only
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. In
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, state departments should interpret to juveniles the value of their mother tongue and local customs and traditions overall. To summarize I would stress, as I have mentioned that local languages should protect. Even so,
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also
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 valuable for
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 generation.
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, one must decide upon for oneself why he studies
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 and what the
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quiet
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 considerable for him.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global communication
  • economic opportunities
  • cultural diversity
  • endangered
  • linguistic heritage
  • inclusive
  • multilingualism
  • language revitalization
  • language policy
  • language preservation
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