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Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living and working in a foreign country

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In today's world,
people
 travel to
various
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country
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 abroad in order to seek more opportunities
such
 as jobs, living qualities, experiences and many more. Some
people
 consider moving to a foreign
country
 and
persue
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pursue
 their life there. It is argued among many
people
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the
advatage
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advantage
advantages
 and
disadvantage
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 of living in
foreign
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a foreign
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country
in
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varios
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various
 reasons.
Therefore
, both
point
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 of view will be
coverd
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 in
this
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Firstly
, living in
foreign
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 can cause you various disadvantages and required a lot of your patients.
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,
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 as language barrier is the most common thing that you will have to deal with each day and it might lead to disadvantages.
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, when
people
counld
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 speak or communicate
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • quality education
  • high standard of living
  • diverse cultures
  • strong healthcare system
  • career advancement
  • safe and stable environment
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