The benefits of computers in modern society far outweigh the disadvantages. What is your opinion?

We are all
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in the digital age where
computer
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has become one of the essential things in life. It is undeniable that because of the
computer
,
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a human
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human
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can create so
much
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more incredible things
to
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this
world
. In my opinion, I strongly agree with the statement that
computer
has more advantages than
the
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disadvantages.
Firstly
,
computer
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is a
neccessary
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necessary
tool to live in
this
modern
world
. Almost every
activities
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in our daily life happened because of the invention of the
computer
.
Furthermore
,
computer
make
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everything seems easier and safer for human.
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, in the factory, they use
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a computer
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computer
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computers
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to create an innovation
such
as
robot
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robots
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to help
on
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producing things and even do some dangerous activities
instead
of
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a human
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human
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humans
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. In conclusion, the invention of
computer
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the computer
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made
this
world
a modern
world
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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