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Nowadays a large amount of advertising aimed at children should be banned because of the negative effects. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Publishing for the sake of promotion has notably increased currently by inducting children into these ads should be prohibited due to bleak effects that some people may argue on
this
 statement.
However
, I absolutely disagree with the aforementioned reason and I will explain more briefly in
this
 essay why I should believe in
this
?
To begin
 ,
with
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 grabbing
such
 opportunities to get ourselves advertised somewhere is the source to become famous overnight and
secondly
, the money.
This
 experience can be
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lifetime offer to show up both the
product
 and yourself in front of an audience unless
this
 playback video doesn't comprise any prohibited content. Despite glamour which is being portrayed nowadays in TV commercials for the
product
, but
also
 the children to enhance their confidence, gratitude into their developing age and to expand their approach towards creativity. On contrary to
this
, according to one study published in UK famous magazine "times" has revealed
this
 fact, the number of advertisements that opted to use children’s a primary actor
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 their play belongs to sugary drinks and fast food which fascinates many viewers to develop
such
 unhealthy habits of eating
Thus
, allow to early come many of the diseases
such
 as obesity, hypertension and diabetes.
In addition
 to
this
, another study has shown that a number of patients have been seen who scrambled to the hospital due to teeth decay after consuming a huge amount of sweet chocolate which was very famous among youngsters due to the theme of power used by malnourish boys in the local ad.
Such
 sort of advertisement
also
 strengthens the company's business by pushing more and more customers to buy their
product
 due to inspiration from these displays reported in the USA when the company which manufactures flavoured noodles went 3 folds. Apart from that in conclusion, these are not kids who are playing in are damaging anyone anyway, but the manufacturer
product
 which actually does not meet the high-quality standards.
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