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Group or team activities can teach more important skill for life than those activities which are done alone.Do you agree or disagree?

#group #team #activities #skill #life
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 the human civilization people tend to flock together whether it is a hunt or a religious attend,while
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group
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 part in life that can be teaching us to aid with the experience that we need to attain for our future other than staying and pursuing them alone.I Definitely agree
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 the argument above mentioned.
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,when we are contributing our precious
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 a project or a study case it is better to continue with the bunch of people as in a group of people.Because each and every person tend not to have
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 quality,there are specific qualities that each person consist of.
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 it will
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 to improve the manner of obeying rules and carrying out the
work
 in a planned environment,due to hard
work
 will
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 upon each and every person in the group.
Secondly
 and most importantly,conducting any
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 together will always be
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,
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even though
time
 management is a good quality that everyone should possess.On top of that teamwork have been a great deal with the children as well.Children
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 to be playful and
self learning
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 category,because they neither feel comfortable in
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team
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work
or
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a
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play.For
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instance when they are in kindergarten they ought to be playing minor games with each other.
That is
 when they realise the importance of team play and managing
time
 throughout the activity. In conclusion,I would like to say that continuing any specific activity as a team will be more realistic and effective other than doing it alone.Nowadays
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 have succeeded
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 proving that.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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