waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years.

The line graph illustrates the tonnage of
waste
which was produced by
few
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companies
over 15 years from 2000 to 2015. Overall, there is a clear tendency of reducing the amount of
waste
by two
companies
,
although
one
company
experienced a significant increase over the period.
Companies
A and
B
succeed in reducing the amount of produced
waste
, starting for
company
A at the top point of 12
tonnes
in 2000. In the same year
company
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B
released about 8
tonnes
of trash.
Although
company
B
experience a small rise to almost 10
tonnes
, it can be seen from the graph that both
companies
significantly reduced the amount of
waste
. In 20015 for
company
A
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the number is 8
tonnes
and for
the
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company
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B
is 3. According to the line graph
company
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C experienced an increase during the whole period of time, in 2000 3
tonnes
of
waste
was released, and in 2015 the number reached its highest point of almost 10
tonnes
produced.
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