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money spent by British parents on their children’s sports between 2008 and 2014. shows the number of children who participated in three sports in Britain over the same time period.

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The graph line of the
first
 chart illustrates the spendings on
sport
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the sport
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 by parents in Britain from 2008 till 2014. The
second
 graph shows the tendency in preferences in three different
sport
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sports
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 activities among British
children
on
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in
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 the same period of time. Overall, it is clear that parents started to spend more money on sports. As for activities preferred by
children
, football got the leading position, swimming got a slight increase in popularity too.
The athletic
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 sports encountered
a
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significant growth. Average spending on
sport
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sports
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 activities for
children
 in 2008 used to be about 20 pounds per month. In 2014
this
 sum rose drastically, hitting just above 30 pounds.
The football
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Football
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 was the most popular among British
children
. In 2008 about 8
million
of
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children
 used to participate in
this
 activity, During the
next
 6
years
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this
sport
 only got more popular in 2014 the number of
children
 hit 9
million
. In 2008 about 2
million
of
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children
 were engaged in swimming. In 2014, more
children
 were involved and the number increased to 3,5
million
. Athletics was the least preferred of the three sports in 2008 with fewer than 1
million
children
 participating. From 2010 to 2012 there was
a
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significant growth and the number reached 5
million
children
. In 2014 the line on the graph slightly declined to 4,8
million
.
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