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Traffic and housing problems could be solved by moving large companies, factories and their employees to the countryside. Do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 254 words.

#traffic #companies #factories #employees #countryside
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Well, it is an argued that the big factories and organizations locate in rural areas which can be helpful to tackle the issues of
traffic
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 as well as housing space because the employees
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 live outside the
cities
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 due to their work. Personally, I disagree with the statement because people leave the countryside for a better lifestyle.
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, higher authorities should be aware folks to use public vehicles rather using the private ones.
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, it declines the
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 congestions and accidents on the road, crowed can reach their home timely.
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, in China, the government made many tubes and trams to commute from one place to another, which helps decrease the
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 and pollution ,
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, people save the petroleum and stay safe from health diseases.
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,
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the community
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 comes in
cities
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 and towns for better infrastructure and facilities, if they get forced to go back in suburbs for work it will waste so much valuable time of them.
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, if any person wants hospital assistance in case of emergency but he lives
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on
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outskirt
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outskirts
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 for his work , it can be dangerous for him to go
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to
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cities
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 for his aid. So that, lawmakers implement new ways to handle the problem wisely. In conclusion,
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 housing and
traffic
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 become solved by moving the companies in rural areas,it is not a permanent solution to handle
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 problem people have many works in
cities
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 so, they go there for numerous reasons.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • housing problems
  • countryside
  • large companies
  • factories
  • employees
  • urban areas
  • land availability
  • relocate
  • stimulate economic development
  • challenges
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • rural areas
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