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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. People living in large cities have to face many problems in everyday life. What are those problems? Should the government encourage people to move to regional towns? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 254 words.

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the given table illustrates the information about the
number
 of
workers
 and manufactory in England and Wales between 1851 to 1901. the general overview is that the total of
workers
 was the highest all of them in 1851.
By contrast
, in the same year, the
number
 of manufactories was the lowest all of them.
Furthermore
, the total of
workers
 had the lowest at 61,000 in 1901.
On the contrary
, in the same year, the
number
 of manufactories was higher than in other years. In 1901, the
number
 of male and female
workers
 were almost equal
in
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1901.
Moreover
, the
number
 of male
workers
 was higher than the
number
 of female
workers
 in 1851, 1871, 1881, 1891, and 1901.
on the other hand
, in 1861, the
number
 of female
workers
 was higher than the
number
 of
male
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males
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. it is noticeable that the
number
 of employees had the highest at 477,100 and there are 225
mamufactories
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manufactories
 in 1851. the
number
 of male
workers
 was the lowest
all
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of them in 1901.
Additionally
, in the same year, the
number
 of females was almost equal
as
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to
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male
Fix the agreement mistake
males
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.
Furthermore
, the
number
 of
famales
Correct your spelling
females
female
families
workers
 was the highest all of them in
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