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Band 2.5

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. People living in large cities have to face many problems in everyday life. What are those problems? Should the government encourage people to move to regional towns? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 254 words.

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the given table illustrates the information about the
number
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 of
workers
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 and manufactory in England and Wales between 1851 to 1901. the general overview is that the total of
workers
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 was the highest all of them in 1851.
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, in the same year, the
number
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 of manufactories was the lowest all of them.
Furthermore
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, the total of
workers
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 had the lowest at 61,000 in 1901.
On the contrary
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, in the same year, the
number
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 of manufactories was higher than in other years. In 1901, the
number
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 of male and female
workers
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 were almost equal
in
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1901.
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, the
number
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 of male
workers
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 was higher than the
number
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 of female
workers
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 in 1851, 1871, 1881, 1891, and 1901.
on the other hand
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, in 1861, the
number
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 of female
workers
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 was higher than the
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 of
male
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males
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. it is noticeable that the
number
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 of employees had the highest at 477,100 and there are 225
mamufactories
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manufactories
 in 1851. the
number
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 of male
workers
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 was the lowest
all
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of them in 1901.
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, in the same year, the
number
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 of females was almost equal
as
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male
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males
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.
Furthermore
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, the
number
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 of
famales
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females
female
families
workers
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 was the highest all of them in
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