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many graduates want to start their first job in a big corporation. many others prefer to work for a small company first. compare and contrast their choices and express your opinion

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nowadays, there are many
graduates
 who want to start their
first
job
 in a big
company
while
 others prefer to start their
first
job
 in a small
company
first
.
this
 essay will discuss both views of
this
 statement on the one hand, many
graduates
 want to start
the
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their
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first
job
 at a big corporation
due to
 it is the dream of many
people
. working for a big
company
for
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as
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 the
first
job
 helps
people
 to have more
experiment
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experience
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 in their career and
also
 have more
chance
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chances
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 to
compere
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compete
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 with other
people
 to have a higher position or higher salary.
in addition
, beginning a career with a big
company
 makes the CV
looks
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look
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 nice and can have a better impression with the next
company
.
however
, working in a big corporation for the
first
job
 can be tough and stressful
due to
 the number of tasks and deadlines.
on the other hand
, some
people
 prefer to work for a small
company
 at
first
 because there are many small companies which are hiring many
people
 at a time.
therefore
,
graduates
 will have more chances to get a
job
.
in addition
, starting the
first
job
 at a small
company
 still
have
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has
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 some
experiment
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experiments
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 but
graduates
 do not have to compete with many rivals or have a huge amount of work to do.
in contrast
, working in a small
company
 may not receive a high salary and
graduates
 may have to change companies many times to have more experiments.
for instance
, there are many
graduates
 who do many jobs at one time because working at a small
company
 does not have enough money to pay for bills and other aspects
in
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of
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 life
to sum up
, there are both advantages and disadvantages to working for a big or a small
company
 and in my point of view, I believe that starting the
first
job
 at a big
company
 is much better
although
 it may have to compete with many
people
 and
stressful
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.
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