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Some people believe the purpose of education should be helping the individual to become useful for society, while others believe it should help individuals to achieve their ambitions. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. Some people think students should study the science of food and how to prepare it. Others think students should spend time on important subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There is always an argument related to
subjects
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 of
study
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. A group’s opinion is that
science
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 of
food
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 and its preparation method is essential to be educated in school; while another group opines that there are more vital
subjects
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 which
students
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 should spend time on. I believe that having a knowledge of
food
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science
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 has the same value as studying critical
subjects
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such
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 as history, mathematics, physics.
This
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 essay will discuss both statements with relevant explanations along with my point of view. On the one hand, there are some fixed
subjects
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 that never get deleted from the
education
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system
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, and some think that these are the only essential
subjects
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 to learn during school like biology, physics, mathematics. The reason for
this
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 is, the heads of the
education
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system
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 in the communities studied in the same
education
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system
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, and they do not think that any changes in the
system
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 can be beneficial for society. As an instance, in Iran, there were 2
subjects
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, one was French language and another one was Meditation, added to the educating section of schools but after 2 years they realized that
students
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 should focus on their main
subjects
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 only, and they have removed them from the
study
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 courses. To clarify, they strongly agree that studying other
subjects
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 rather than the main ones is a waste of time and money.
On the other hand
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, some people think that youngsters ought to
study
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food
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science
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 and the preparation method of
food
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.
This
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 is because
food
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 is an essential factor in everybody’s life;
hence
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, having proper knowledge related to its ingredients and preparation can definitely improve the health of an individual.
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, a survey done in Tehran university shows that
students
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 who
study
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 nutrition and its related field are much healthier compared to
students
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 in other fields. I completely agree that nowadays all people are encouraged to have fast foods;
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,
this
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 subject makes them aware of how healthy
food
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 can improve their general health. In conclusion,
although
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 studying the main
subjects
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 is essential during
education
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,
subjects
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 like
food
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science
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 can have lots of positive effects on the community.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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