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Business and Money In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a country, while others believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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What’s more, I laid emphasis on improving my mathematical and data processing techniques in research projects. I was once fully involved in the research about exploring the pulse power supply of wastewater treatment based on sliding mode
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 the trace of the system swiftly deftly between two areas of the sliding mode.
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 to reduce the frequency of fluctuations and added integrators to make the order the same to prevent a decrease in robustness.
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, the Liapunov stability of the reachability inequation was verified.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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