Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with?

Online orders have become quite popular these days. There is no age limit,
people
of all ages got used to it. The main reason for
this
to become popular is advertising. Some
people
argue that
advertisements
are quite
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helpful
to learn about new
things
and be updated
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others argue that the
advertisements
are manipulative, they make
people
purchase unnecessary
things
. Personally, I agree with the
first
point and I support it by elaborating in the
next
paragraphs. Recently, my neighbour got hospitalized due to severe nerve pain.
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suggested
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to
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not involve in any
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work
and to take complete bed rest. She is allowed only to do some simple exercises. As there is no one else in the family to care
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work
, she is very much worried. I have suggested
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the
dish washer
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and automatic
vaccum
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vacuum
cleaner available online.
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made her job easy and I was able to suggest her only due to the
advertisements
channel that I follow.
Moreover
, I have recommended her the personal maid who comes and takes care of complete
work
at home. Even
this
I have learned from an advertisement. There are many
things
available in the market in our budget that
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our needs without any human interference which saves
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of time.
Adverstiments
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Advertisements
are not
particualr
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particular
to any field, so it helps out everyone with different needs. Many of us wouldn't have known about mobiles, washing
manchines
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machines
,
tvs
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TVs
, online food deliveries and many other uncountable
things
which we use in our daily life to ease our
work
without
advertisements
. So, I conclude by saying that
advertisements
have become eye-openers for many members
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. It gives us knowledge
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new inventions. Even though man invents new
things
, it would become useless if it is not known to
people
. The only best way to let know
people
about new inventions and help
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the
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use of
it
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is
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advertisements
". It is always in our hands to either use the information or
ignore
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.
Therefore
listen carefully and choose wisely!!
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • persuade
  • manipulative
  • unnecessary
  • excessive
  • artificial needs
  • desires
  • consumers
  • oversaturation
  • impulse buying
  • financial problems
  • inform
  • educate
  • features
  • benefits
  • innovations
  • raise awareness
  • social issues
  • positive behavior
  • enrich
  • well-being
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