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The use of cell phones (mobile phones) has grown rapidly in the past few years. People use them for both business and personal reasons. What are the advantages and disadvantages of the Widespread use of mobile phones? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays mobile
usage
 has been constantly increased in both businesses as well as personal reasons. The mobile phone is an astonishing inventor .
This
 essay will describe both advantages and disadvantages of mobile phone
usage
. 
First
 of all , the main reason for the rapid growth of mobile phones is due to the fastest connectivity to family and friends .
Secondly
 , due to the mobile network ,connectivity helps to connect with certain apps, social medial , certain google searches, maps are been instantly used to search their distinction
for example
 when someone is in an emergency they can contact their beloved one with a
second
 to save them for their bad situation.
Furthermore
, it can
also
 help them to develop their business and can be updated with the ongoing project with other clients Contrary, the main disadvantage is distraction and addiction to mobile phones affect the business as well as a person .
This
 kind of addiction leads them to less communication to the near society , it
also
 affects the face to face communication with friends and families. For example, people being more active in social media lead them to less active with the surrounding people which leads them to loneliness .
Moreover
, the distraction will affection business growth . To sum
usage
 of mobile phones has both advantages as well as disadvantages as loneliness, using them for a limited period and monitoring them with screen
usage
 which will not affect the surrounding society
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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