People, who go to live in other countries, should follow the customs and traditions of the new country. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Write at least 250 words

Most of them believe that migrants should obey the
countries
customs and
culture
of the place when they choose their new home. I partially agree with
this
statement because a person should follow
countries
law and order to maintain the security of local people and quality of lifestyle,
However
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an individual could not force anyone to follow their
culture
and traditions because that
their
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own choice.
First
of all, nowadays
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of people choosing the new
country
as their
second
home
therefore
as a migrant we should follow their
country
rules and regulation without any dought. Each
country
has a law to protect its local inhabitants, as a
migrant
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we should respect the individuals.
For example
, in
middle
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east they have strong punishments for breaking rules and their regulations
therefore
humans can not complain about their punishment. They need to follow the
countries
rules despite the punishment is harsh.
Second
of all, different humans
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have kind of their own
tradition
to follow
therefore
we can not force them to
adopt
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to new
culture
or
tradition
because many Asian
countries
have their special
tradition
and they will not be able to convert suddenly to
new
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tradition
.
For instance
, Muslims
they
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should eat halal (the way they cut the animal) foods and
also
they should not eat pork.
This
menas
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means
if a Muslim person goes to china he will not be able to
adopt
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to eat pork.
Thus
, nobody can rule to change individuals
tradition
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traditions
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in order to migrate to
new
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country
. In conclusion, every
country
has its own government administrative process and a totally different
culture
to follow.
However
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as
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my opinion who wants to live in a different
country
should obey the customs of the
country
and no one should influence anyone to follow the
tradition
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural assimilation
  • integration
  • traditions
  • customs
  • identity
  • diversity
  • tolerance
  • heritage
  • intercultural
  • enrichment
  • alienate
  • segregate
  • dialogue
  • uniformity
  • assimilate
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