People living in the 21st century are enjoying better quality of life compared to people who lived in the previous centuries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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century, while others believe that
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comfortable
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. In my
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with the statement. Nowadays
people
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people
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.
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the 21st
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21st century
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lifestyle
. Nowadays
people
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their fingertips because of
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technology improvement. What I am coming to say is that verities of entertainment facilities available at the moment whether it is outside event or at home.
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most of the adults and younger generation
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to video
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such
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options and
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plays
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part
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different
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Thus
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period have
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lifestyle
than older
people
in previous centuries.
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, early days
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lifestyle
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people
,
therefore
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person interaction and,
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I conclude that humans they have lived in the past centuries and
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their own way of
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a better
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lifestyle
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Technological advancements
  • Healthcare improvements
  • Economic growth
  • Social changes
  • Global connectivity
  • Standard of living
  • Life expectancy
  • Gender equality
  • Legal rights
  • Globalization
  • Cultural exchange
  • Access to information
  • Environmental concerns
  • Sustainable development
  • Stress levels
  • Quality of life
  • Medical progress
  • Job opportunities
  • Income disparity
  • Life satisfaction
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