Schools are no longer necessary because children can get so much information available through the internet, and they can study just as well at home. To what extent do agree or disagree?

These days, along with
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cutting-edge technology, many people think that
children
should study on the
Internet
at home
instead
of going to
school
. I personally believe that students should go to
school
to gain knowledge and
this
essay is going to discuss my point of view.
First
and foremost,
schools
supply censored knowledge as well as systematic. Meanwhile, there is a lot of uncensored and misleading information on the
Internet
.
Moreover
, the information on the
Internet
has many violent images and inappropriate
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, which would bring negative effects to the mental development of
children
. The
second
reason is that
schools
not only provide scientific knowledge
,
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but
also
help students improve their soft skills. Specifically,
schools
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like a small society,
children
could learn how to make friends as well as contact with their peers, improve their teamwork
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, communication
skill
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as well as build their future relationships.
In addition
, the advantage of learning at
school
is that
children
could get guidance from teachers. Indeed, when studying at home, students do not have
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ability, so they become easily frustrated and give up.
However
, in
school
, teachers with useful methods of teaching would take care, promote
children
's study and help
children
fully concentrate on their study.
Furthermore
,
schools
also
educate
children
about the moral side, teach
children
how to obey the rules, and how to become
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good person with a meaningful lifestyle, which do not exist on the
Internet
. In conclusion, I firmly believe that
children
should go to
school
to gain important information.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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