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Some people believe famous people's support towards international aid organizations draws the attention to problems, while others think celebrities make the problems less important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #support #aid #organizations #attention #celebrities
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In recent years, there are different opinions about whether influencers’ help is necessary for international aid organizations to solve the
problem
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. Some
people
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 are content that celebrities’ intervention can expose the
problem
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 to the public, while others believe that their reputation overshadows the
problem
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 itself. I will discuss both viewpoints and give my own opinion. On the one hand, some
problems
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 indeed can be solved more quickly and efficiently with the help of influencers. Particularly, Influential
people
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 can use their reputation and social influence to expose these things to more
people
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 to solve the
problems
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 that have not been handled for financial or government reasons.
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, followers would be more concerned about the
problem
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 of poverty in some mountainous areas if their idols release a vlog about that.
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, some
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 argue that influencers are likely to divert the public attention from the
problem
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 itself. Some influential
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 only care about their own profits, they may take advantage of these
problems
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 as a tool to enhance their reputations.
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, the public attention will deviate to the celebrities
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 of the issue itself. In conclusion, in some situations, celebrities intervene might help international aid organizations to solve
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 efficiently, but in some cases,
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 kind of help may overshadow the
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 and belittle it. From my perspective,
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 influential
people
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 indeed have some effect on
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 solutions, they should be used in the proper and necessary time.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • endorse
  • international aid organizations
  • public awareness
  • amplify
  • advocacy
  • systemic change
  • oversimplification
  • trivialization
  • undermining
  • severity
  • misinformed advocacy
  • distorts
  • hamper
  • guided by experts
  • constructive
  • strategically
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