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At the present time,the population of some countries include relatively large number of young adults,compared with the older people.Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages.

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Introduction
In
the
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contemporary society,youths are more tend to involve in social works,politics and
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another type
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 of extracurricular activities.In modern
community
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 younger generation
consist
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 of
higher
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 number of partners other than elders.Having more youths in a
community
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 depicts more energy and power than having older people.
Body paragraph 1
One evident benefit is having more teenagers,so they will be the leaders of the country,and they will be in search of new techniques for
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income and
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development,which they want to maximize.
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,there will
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more
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 energetic atmosphere every time
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because all young,smart people are the ones ruining
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democracy.For
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instance
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 if we ought to be in a youth club it will be functional very much other than like old age club which seeks relaxation.
Body paragraph 2
On the other
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 there are obvious disadvantages that
,
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teenagers
are mostly tend
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 to indulge
with
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 crimes,so there will be no responsible persons for their acts.They will always like to be misguided by each and
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.
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 will be a cause for
increasing
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 crime rate of the
community
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.
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Moreover
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 there will be
lack
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a lack
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 of job opportunities for the ones who
seeks
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 jobs due to increasing the competition between applicant.Some of them will have to
abondon
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abandon
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mother land
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motherland
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 as well in search of
profession
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Conclusion
In conclusion,while there are plus points to having more younger people in
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community
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,but will be a catastrophe for the upcoming future problems like lack of job opportunities and as well as
increasement
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increment
 of crime rate.It is
better
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 option to ensure a safe future other than thinking about
present
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the present
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographic
  • workforce
  • productivity
  • innovation
  • skilled labor
  • social development
  • technology
  • dividend
  • competition
  • resources
  • social welfare
  • unrest
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