You have had a bank account for a few years. Recently you received a letter from the bank stating that your account is $240 overdrawn and that you will be charged $70 which will be taken directly from your account. You know that this information is incorrect.

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Dear Manager, With respect to the letter that was delivered to me regarding the misinformation of an amount overdrawn from my account. I am an account holder with number 0456 8347 6523 7649, from

last

five years in your respected bank. Three years ago, I took a study loan from the bank and was paying monthly instalments of $800, which was directly deducted from my savings account annually. Eventually,

last

month, all my payback were completed according to the loan department agreement.

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, yesterday, I received an epistle from your side which shocked me that I will be charged $70. As per my perspective, there is no incorrect information. Immediately, after the pursuit of the mini statement , I came to know that EMI was deducted

this

month

also

Hence

, for

this

,clerical-error I would like you to re-check and compensate

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deduction. In case of any queries kindly contact me on my registered mobile number. I hope for your cooperation to resolve

this

problem Thanking you in anticipation. Yours Faithfully, 10 January

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2022 Neha Sharma

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Grammar mistakes
 

8 paragraphs

175 words

4.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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You have had a bank account for a few years. Recently you received a letter from the bank stating that your account is $240 overdrawn and that you will be charged $70 which will be taken directly from your account. You know that this information is incorrect.

Fully explain your ideas

some people believe that technology has made the lives of workers easier while other people disagree. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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in a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums or money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.