IN MANY PLACES NEW HOMES ARE NEEDED, BUT THE ONLY SPACE AVAILABLE FOR BUILDING THEM IS IN THE COUNTRYSIDE.SOME PEOPLE BELIEVE IT IS MORE IMPORTANT TO PROTECT THE COUNTRYSIDE AND NOT BUILD NEW HOMES THERE. WHAT IS YOUR OPINION ABOUT THIS?

Presently,the problem of living space has risen into
prominance
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in many places of the country.there is absolutely no way to build new houses in some cities, and a lot of people suggest
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out construction in the
countryside
.
however
, it is a controversial topic introducing heavy debates. Opponents of urbanization of
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rural areas state that it would cause a dramatic effect on the natural ecosystem of
such
places. The most drastic consequences are caused by infrastructure that necessarily follows any human settlement -
that is
, roads, power lines, means of water supply, and
such
.The construction of those engineering projects leads to the destruction of natural biomes of ponds rivers and forests, causing many animals to migrate and go extinct.The arguments of
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do make sense, but
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also
valuable ideas supporting
countryside
occupation.
First
of all, not even the most extreme supporters of spreading urbanization maintain that all of the
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should be filled with homes all over the place . In fact, there are good examples of even larger cities living perhaps not in harmony with
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from
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of cooperation. Having
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of parks inside inhabited area
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both people to feel
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better and plants and animals to have some sort of home. if
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present an example, the city of
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where I live has a large island between the parts of
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which is covered with trees and largely unoccupied,being a nice counterpart to heavily populated nearby districts. In a conclusion,
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would like to stress that while opponents of
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settlements have many valid points, the situation is not as drastic as they portray it, and the co-existence of
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population with nature is quite possible.
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