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Many students now have the opportunity to study in other countries. Studying abroad may bring some benefits to some students, but it also has a significant number of disadvantages. Discuss both sides of the argument and give your own opinion

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Nowadays, with the
world
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 becoming more globalized students have more
opportunity
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opportunities
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 to
study
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 in other
countries
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. Even within my
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, I see a
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 of
people
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 including my friends go to
other
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another country
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country
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 to continue their
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study
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studies
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. I think the advantages will outweigh the disadvantages.
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 from a developing
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 in a developed
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 and return to their
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country
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 bringing
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 means
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 can
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 not return to their
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country
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 and continue living in the other
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. I saw
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 within my own
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, a developing
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People
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 go to developed
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 to
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 and end up
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 living
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 they finished their
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. Even though, it is fully their right to choose whether to return or not. By not returning
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, they cannot apply their
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 in their
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country
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. It means there will be no
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 transfers, which
probably
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 one of the many reasons
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to
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why these developed
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 open up opportunities for
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 that want to
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 in their
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. Even though,
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 disadvantage occurs lots of time. I
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 saw
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returned
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 from their studies and bring their
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 back to be applied within the
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. I think
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 why the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. There are a
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these
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people
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, which will help to distribute
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 and help
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 within their
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. If these opportunities are given to a
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 of
people
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 from all over the
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, it will
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 of
people
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 in the future. In conclusion, I think the benefits given to these students will be an advantage that will outweigh a
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 of disadvantages. Students from a developing
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 will be able to bring back the
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 they learned from a developed
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. I think
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 will be a good thing for the future of the
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,
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 because
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 enables the distribution of
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 throughout the
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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