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Because many children are not able to learn foreign languages, schools should not force them to learn foreign languages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 to study
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language
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 in schools is a hot potato in
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 school period.
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 my personal view, it would be a sensitive problem in terms of emotion, education and
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. Critics argue that the majority of
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 can easily feel picky about swotting up on the
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 because it is quite hard to study. It is proved to be
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 by the research that
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 who were forced to do something they didn't want have taken enormous stress, even remaining as a trauma.
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, some students who don’t have a knack for
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 abilities have difficulties in spending time for
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language
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. Of course, they are incapable to achieve useful
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 frustrated with the limit. The end result is that students waste time and may feel discouraged and lack self-esteem in an important period of self-establishment.
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,
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 are better than adults in fresh
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 acquisition. Research has shown that
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 learning is most effective until the teenager period, particularly in pronunciation which is critical in learning
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. Plus, it’s the era of globalization and being skilled in
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language
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 is beneficial in many cases. Regardless of what field someone
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 in, enabling to use various languages would be great
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 him if he considers
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 market. For these reasons, it is hard to deny that
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 have many advantages if they make effort into additional languages. In conclusion, despite the low rates of success in many cases, the impact of attempting to learn a
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 is itself tremendously beneficial. It is ideal if the school provides a familiar environment for foreign languages that the students don’t feel repulsed.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

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  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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